In recent months, explicit images of the most famous celebrities ,such as Jennifer Lawrence and Kaley Cuoco, have been leaked in an event called the ‘Fappening’. This has caused a lot of commotion on the Internet and it has brought much excitement to everyone, everywhere.
In actual fact, this is very inappropriate and, quite frankly, disgusting behaviour from the people who encourage this. Celebrities deserve to have their privacy as much as we do as they are still people and they have their rights. Taking explicit pictures for personal reasons are well-justified but the fact that these private matters are being exploited is just wrong because these images have been released with no consent.
December 18, 2014 at 8:16 am
Hello Sky,
You have used some emptive vocabulary to present a controversial topic. You have attempted to introduce a counter-argument, but you have actually just made you second paragraph stronger. What would happen if you edited this to be one longer paragraph?
Target:
‘This has caused a lot of commotion on the Internet and it has brought much excitement to everyone, everywhere.’ Develop this – do you mean that the public have reacted in a particular way? What was this?
Remember – you do not have to use counter-argument. If you are planning to do this, experiment with the variety of ways to introduce your counter-arguments